how to kill a monster in poetry
- Jan. 28, 2015, 8:32 a.m.
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yeah yeah yeah
stare into the abyss too long
the abyss might stare back
sure that’s a step in the process
but come on let’s face it
that’s some first-level shit
instead stay with it
challenge the abyss
to a staring contest
really dig your heels in
because if you get past
that abyss staring back
you’ll see that it’s nothing
just an absence of light
bring a match
there is no such thing as darkness
there’s only the absence of light
there’s only the times it isn’t day
there’s no such thing as the night
there is no abyss
once you realize you
make the choice to bring a spark
choose how to blaze and
transcend the dark
you can do it
but you might have to
have the abyss stare back into you
until you realize
the abyss just doesn’t exist first
but you can do it
I believe in you
Last updated January 28, 2015
Narrator ⋅ January 28, 2015
I like the idea of this but I'm having trouble with it. You don't seem to rhyme in the 1st stanza but do rhyme in the next 3. Then it sort of rhymes in the last stanza but I can't quite wrap my head around the rhythm or meter or something. It changes in the last chunk enough that I keep stumbling on it.
littlefallsmets Narrator ⋅ January 29, 2015
Yeah, I've been playing around with changing things from stanza to stanza... I'm gonna try it out live first but you may have a good point, I may well end up changing it, I just wanna see if it works outloud like this first.
Squidobarnez ⋅ January 28, 2015
this is freakin' awesome, don't worry about rhyming mumbo-jumbo.
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