Advice needed please in OD

So, here’s the thing. I’m thinking of entering this short story competition and I think I may already have a story to fit the theme.

May being the operative word.

I was wondering if anyone would like to read said story and tell me what they think? (For those who have read some of my stuff before, the story in question is called Alicia McFarlane: A Fragment.) And if you want to give me general feedback as well, that’d be cool.

Will